Wednesday 27 November 2019
WK 7 synthesis work
In class we finished doing the dung beetles stuff so now we are back to the synthesis work. This one was about making a trap for an animal called the stag without killing it because in our story the boys dream of becoming a hunter but when they killed the stag his hopes died. I enjoyed this because I got to draw all of the different stuff. My trap is about the walls closing in on anything that goes in and leaves food and water.
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Hi Petelo! My name is Hana and I'm a year 5 from Yaldhurst Model School!
ReplyDeleteWow Petelo! I love the drawing you made! It looks really cool! I love the little details you added in. As well as the colour! It really gives it a nice pop of colour!
This reminds me of when I had to point out all of the features of an animal! Instead, your pointing out all of the features of your trap! (That doesn't kill animals, of course)
Next time, you could make the labels more clear, so that we can see them and read them to see what they are. And, if you can, you could try to make the title a little more exciting! Like, My Superb Synthesis Work! Or something like that.
Keep up the awesome work!
From Hana
Kia Ora Petelo,
ReplyDeleteI like your Trap that makes People dont have to kill any animals.
I never thought of making a cage.next time you could make the writing clear.
Hi Petelo,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you have added in a picture of what you mean. Also I like how you explained about what it was. Maybe next time you could go over the words in a vivid or something but Good Job!
Kia Ora Petelo!
ReplyDeleteThis was really cool to look at and see all the different ideas that you have put in it. I really like how it is eye catching because of the bright colors that you've used and I think that it's really creative!
I really like how it's really detailed and that you've added a lot of things that will help to catch the animal as well!
Maybe next time you could make the writing a bit more clear because it was kind of hard to read and that's what happened to me last time I did one of these so maybe you could use text boxes and type it in on top of the picture but except for that Ka Pai!
¬Siale
Aloha Petelo, Your trap looks really cool, and I like how you had a lot of information. Next time you could make the words a bit more bolder and you could add a little more colour. But other than that it looks great.
ReplyDeleteKind Regards,
Greer