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Tuesday, 25 July 2017

The creepy man


The man

Once on a dark and rainy day it was a day that we all got to stay home but I really wanted to go outside but I could only look outside so I was looking outside but then lighting came down then I saw a man looking at the house he had all black on so I couldn’t really see him


suddenly another lightning came and he waved then the lightning stopped and he was gone so I ran away to everyone else I didn’t tell them. Then someone was knocking I was scared to answer the door so I went into the kitchen and got a knife.Then I opened the door and


there was no one there so I went back to the lounge and sat down I was so scared that I ran around yelling in the lounge it was like a horror movie. Then someone was knocking at the door again so I brought the knife but still no one was there so if anyone came and knocked on the


door I wouldn’t answer  the door. Then I looked out the window  and I saw him the man who waved at me but this time there was no lighting. Then he walked into the front yard and he got closer and closer until lightning came down but he was still there so I woke someone up and when I woke them up he was gone I was so creeped out that I could barely even move.Then someone started to knock on the door this time someone else knocked on the door someone else got it but they didn’t come back in so I


went outside with the knife and a clown came up to me so I panicked  and threw the knife at him and he died but the man came back so I dragged the person who got the door  and grabbed the knife but when I got inside I felt the body and it was fake.Then I saw the real one and she told me that she made these so then she doesn't have to walk around so I asked her if she could make me to so she did.Then when she was finished I looked outside to see if the man was there so I went out with my robot but when I went outside  of the room he was there I didn’t even hear him come in then he was looking straight   at me  then I noticed it was my dad the whole time pranking me.

The End

1 comment:

  1. Hi Petelo, you have used great emotive language to get us to feel scared. The plot twist at the end was hilarious. My Dad would do that too. Next time you could add more suspense by making the story longer. You are a good writer.

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